For all teenagers. What do you think of my story?

i think the story starts off too quickly. i think you should start off the story with some background information so the reader knows what kind of guy elijah is. so for example, you could say elijah was walking home from school, thinking about whatever whatever. then you can slip in some of his information. like how his social life at school is, his family life, etc. etc.. you have something interesting, but you have to develop that story into something more. the readers want a character they can relate to, that has a past and most importantly, it is your job as the author to make your character come to life.